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Sunday, 15 November 2015

Time, an enigma!



Have
You seen
The way pain
Makes time stagnant?
Every moment seems
A painful, frosty night
Whereas happiness makes time
Rush away within blink of eyes
Like a sweet, rosy dream of midnight
Gone before we could totally grasp it.



The poetry form, Etheree, consists of 10 unrhymed lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables. Etheree can also be reversed and written in 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1 order.

Linking this poem to Poetry Pantry #278


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43 comments:

  1. surely, surely

    have a nice Sunday Purba

    much love...

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  2. Love the comparison of pain to a frosty night! Powerful writing :)

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    1. Thank you so much, Sanaa. Glad you loved it :)

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  3. So true.. in bliss the time will pass with the blink of an eye.

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  4. I liked this form....and your words rain down with truth....

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  5. "like a sweet rosy dream of midnight". How I love that!

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  6. So true, I think. When a person is happy time goes way too fast; but when one is unhappy it seems to stand still. I like the way you have used the etheree form.

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    1. Exactly Mary. This happens so often and how and why we still wonder. Time is really an enigma.
      Thank you so much :)

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  7. With such ease you say convey such deep meanings is so wonderful. The form of poetry is wonderful and you have used it with such precision. :-)

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    1. Thank you so much, Gaurab. I also loved this form and so tried to use it for conveying this truth/wonder. I am so happy that you liked the poem :)

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  8. Perfectly completed this not easy form, and in timely manner!

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  9. So so true.....time is a trickster and pain and happiness further delude us....

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  10. What a lovely poem and so true ~ I really like this form. Thanks for sharing!

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  11. A good thought ... a joyful perceptive ... to reflect on, in such dark days.

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  12. Didiiii You make each form of poetry so meaningful n convey a message <3 *how much I love your poems* ^_^

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  13. A new kind, I don't think I have read this kind of poem before.
    Reads good and I liked the thoughts you penned.

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  15. What a perceptive poem - painful times do seem to last longer than fleeting happiness and yet both (i hope) are present...we must treasure the happy times most definitely

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  16. Wow, this one seems new for me, I was never known to this. You have portrayed such a deep thought in such a condensed form. Superbly penned dearie :*

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  17. I can see some new styles of poetry as a writer.
    Great Post..!!

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  18. Lovely delicate attempt and you are good at it.

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  19. Theory of relativity explained poetically!

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  20. Gone before we could totally grasp it.

    All good things must come to an end so they say. But it ends too fast. Truly said Purba!

    Hank

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  21. It's beautiful! How can you concentrate on the intricacies of the syllables, while maintaining the beauty of the poetry is beyond me! I'm unable to do that in a haiku too! :D

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  22. Nicely done, putting the longest time in the shortest lines!

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  23. being in pain or anxiety seems to extend a second or a minute into hours. sometimes, we wish to disappear for a moment

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  24. Indeed, Pain freezes time. Those last 2 lines said it all

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  25. Awesome. Nice to know about Etheree too which I was not aware.

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  27. I liked this poem, a new way of expression.

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  28. Insightful lines! loved its simplicity.

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  29. Loved this poetryPurba. Its beautiful. Will try out this form.

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